Talk:Aang

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This article or parts of it were created based, in whole or in part, on this version of the English Wikipedia article. The complete history of the article can be found there. Nataly8 (talk) 17:44, 14 August 2010 (UTC)

Simplifying

This is the second paragraph from the article:

In the show, Aang is the last alive Airbender and a monk of the Air Nomads, the only race of people who can master the air. He is also a supercentenarian at the age of 112.[1] He was in suspended animation for one century, making his biological age twelve.[1] It is revealed in the second episode that he is the current incarnation of the Avatar, the spirit of the planet manifested in human form. As the Avatar, Aang controls the elements and is tasked with keeping the Four Nations at peace.[2] The show follows Aang's journeys to complete this task.[2]

These are complex words: Aang - it is a name so it can not be made simple airbender - is linked to "air", which is not right. monk - this can be linked supercentenarian - a complex word, even though it is linked, it is not necessary biological - not needed suspended animation - not simple revealed - simplify episode planet maifested elements tasked To make it simple I would do the following:

Aang is the last living Airbender. They were the only race of people who could control the air. He is 112 years old.[1] Because he had been frozen in an iceberg for 100 years, he has not become older, and is still like a 12 year old. [1] In the second show, it is discovered that Aang is the incarnation of the Avatar. This is the spirit of the planet in human form. As the Avatar, Aang controls the elements and must keep the Four Nations at peace.[2] The show follows Aang's journeys to do this.[2]

This is much simpler - keep trying. --Peterdownunder (talk) 11:39, 15 August 2010 (UTC)

Refs

  1. 1.0 1.1 1.2 1.3 "The Boy in the Iceberg". Director: Dave Filoni, Writers: Michael Dante DiMartino, Bryan Konietzko. Avatar: The Last Airbender. Nickelodeon. 2005-02-21. No. 1, season 1.
  2. 2.0 2.1 2.2 2.3 "Watch Out For Avatar on September 10!". Nickelodeon Asia. Retrieved 2008-03-14.

18px Done. Another comments? Nataly8 (talk) 14:29, 15 August 2010 (UTC)

Simplifying

A general note: a Basic English wordlist is here, on our sister project. Limit yourself to those words.

I took a random paragraph. Here it is. Aang appeared in Escape from the Spirit World, an online video game that can be found on Nickelodeon's official website. The game includes certain plot changes that are not shown in the show. The show's directors, Michael DiMartino and Bryan Konietzko, claim the events are canon.[1]

A simple version should use the 850 words and avoid using complex terms unless needed.

So, this is simpler: Aang is in Escape from the Spirit World, an online video game that is on Nickelodeon's real website. The game has some plot changes that are not in the show. The show's directors, Michael DiMartino and Bryan Konietzko, say the events are canon.[1]

I-20the highway 16:23, 15 August 2010 (UTC)

  1. 1.0 1.1 Lua error in package.lua at line 80: module 'Module:Citation/CS1/Suggestions' not found.

18px Done. Nataly8 (talk) 16:37, 15 August 2010 (UTC)